hello,
here is my life in Paris chapter 2
chapter 2
my life in Paris
I just woke up in HOSPITAL?! I was confused but also worried and then I looked around in my hospital bed and saw my Aunt talking to the Nurse! Just then I shouted Aunt and she hurried over! she said "omg your awake! I was so worried about you! you passed out and I called 112*!" just then I was looking around, I sat up and said "is mum and dad here?" then my aunt started crying! then she spoke the words of doom "ummmm so your parents ummmmmm well left you! and now I am your......caregiver! well you see they thought because you had ADHD..." just then I inturupted her "I have ADHD!!!!!!" then I let her continue "well yea!" then I was like " what what what wait my brain can't keep up" then my Aunt said "we will go back to your house to get your stuff and then we will go to my house, your new home. oh and you don't have to call me Aunt anymore now you can call me...
* the police, fire and hospital number in Paris!
hope you liked that chapter!
blog you later,
Lila
very cool😎😎😎
ReplyDeletethanks did you really read it?
DeleteYour character certainly has to process a lot of new information! I wonder if you will continue to explore the feelings she has in the next chapter? Well done with your use of punctuation in this story! Great to see speech marks, exclamation marks and ellipses.
ReplyDeleteTeacher tip: read you story out loud to yourself and this will help you identify where commas and full stops should be.